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Keeping in its feathers
The droplets and the quivers
Splashing away the treasure
This is my first ever (and rather amateurish) attempt at Haiku. Nevertheless, I tried to do it and am glad for it.
Thanks to Corinne and Ruchira Shukla for this wonderful prompt on Writetribe. Enjoyed doing it. Hope I’ve done justice to it. 🙂
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beautiful photo and a haiku 🙂
Thank you. Wasn’t sure if I did it right. Welcome here. 🙂
Thank you for liking the write up ! Lovely Haiku here.. Not once is the seasonal reference made explicitly but it gives us such a clear image of the rains. I love the association with the bird ! How about not using “it” in the first line – do you think that might make the Haiku more compact ?
Thanks Ruchira…this was my first time so I wasn’t sure if my approach was right.
You’re right. Can do away with the ‘it’. Will do so pronto! Thanks for pointing it out and making the Haiku better.
Your first attempt is awesome. I will try to write one too.
Thanks Sulekha….I’m sure you do a good job of it. Do it soon. 🙂
Lovely first attempt! And luuuuuv the pic 🙂
Thanks Swaram 🙂
Long time…love to see you back on my blog. 🙂
the haiku and picture went perfectly together and also on the chosen prompt 🙂
Richa
Thanks Richa…added the picture deliberately…so even if my poem didn’t make sense people would know what I’m talking about! 😛
Awesome!!
Kathy
http://gigglingtruckerswife.blogspot.com
Thanks Kathy 🙂
Such a lovely take on the picture, Varsha. Great for a first try. All of you are giving me a complex now – scared to try one. 🙂
Oh you’re too kind Corinne…and uff…that humility! 🙂
I know you’re going to be awesome….write soon please. 🙂
beautiful and that pic is so apt Varsh 🙂 !
good one
Thanks Afshan 🙂
What a cute haiku. Absolutely loved it. Picture and words go so well together. Love the droplets and the quivers.
Dropping by from the haiku prompt.
You write very good haiku. Now expecting more haiku from you.
Vivek
Thanks Vivek….first attempt…glad you liked it.
Yes…guess I can try my hand at more haiku in future. 🙂