Harish, Girish and Jagdish were brothers and wished they weren’t. Their abject poverty made them see each other as loathed competitors. They reluctantly allowed each other claim on the rare morsels of food their alcoholic father provided them. Their mother left them in the dead of the night few years ago for which they were mocked endlessly.
The unfortunate teenagers stepped into the world of crime without much deliberation. Strangely, it united them. It all started with petty thefts and chain-snatching but they were soon regular visitors of the police station for battery and extortion.
They hit jackpot one day when they realised that a man they were sent to kidnap was loaded with cash. Blinded with greed, they slayed him and made away with the booty instead.
While their ‘masters’ frenetically sent search teams in their pursuit the brothers reached an abandoned mansion outside their town. A rusted key hung on a tattered pole outside. They grabbed it and found their way in.
The sight inside stopped them dead in their tracks. A gang of drug-dealers was animatedly operating in its headquarters, and they didn’t like visitors.
“Kill them!” and three gunshots were the last thing the brothers heard.
Words: 200
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Unwittingly opening doors to hell! That is a very different take on the post.
Thank you, Neha. Good or bad, it all comes back to us, right? What we sow we shall reap!
Woag! What an amazing take on this prompt. Great job Varsha
Thanks a lot, Dips! Waiting for your take on the prompt too. Write away! 🙂
What an action-packed Bollywood style story that was!
Know what Tulika, after I read it I felt it had the James Hadley Chase kind of quality. Of course, Bollywood is known to heavily borrow from the west. 😛
Thanks for reading. Nice to see you on my blog! 🙂
A pacy read. Isn’t it true today how poverty and greed drives people to crime. Your story echoes the society we live in and sadly so.
An effective and racy short story on greed in today’s world and poverty driving people to the edge. It’s sad on what poverty and greed leads on to!
How true, Vishal. Poverty and greed can lead people to commit heinous crimes without thinking about their repurcussions. Nots ure if we can feel sorry for them.
Thanks for reading, glad to see you on my blog after a long time! 🙂
I agree and not sure on the sympathy part for there are other ways one can lead life with dignity na! Lure of money!
A sad end just when life seemed to be looking up for the trio!
Loved your unusual take on the prompt,Varsha.
Thank you for writing for #WoWe
Your prompts make me think hard and try writing something different. Glad you liked it, M!
Gripping and thrilling, I love your take on the prompts. It’s not easy to build a story with words limitation, kudos.
I love your imaginative take on these #WoWe prompts. Kudos to writing a credible story in 200 words!
Alas, we often meet our end/fate at unexpected places. Very different take on the prompt, Varsha. Thanks so much for writing in. XOXO.
Another great take Varsha. Trio had tough luck all the while
What a cool story line that was. Loved it. Very well penned. Keep it up..
this is such a new concept for this topic. really liked the idea of how you have articulated your thoughts into words.
I enjoy reading your short stories! It’s quick to read and it’s got a strong moral! ??
I loved the imagination but feel that this is somehow a bitter truth of the society!!Very nicely written
Interesting read and powerful subtle message. Karma comes back.
So one must always knock at the door! Great take on picture prompt Varsha, loved the flow of the story.
That is an interesting take on this prompt. I quite like this short story.
Framing a fiction and taking it to the climax in just 200 words is not easy. But you kept it crisp from the beginning.
Poverty coupled with lack of guidance and support from parents can lead people to choose wrong paths. But as they say, muft me mili cheeZe raas nahi aati..same happened with the brothers.
This reminded me of good old time Bollywood action films. I honestly felt the characters felt a little bad for the characters but the end was well-deserved.
Great creativity. The story is short yet gripping till the end. I was expecting some miracle as they already suffered enough at such young age, but the twist you added has an X factor for sure.
Hey that was action packed and full of wonder. I want to know what happened after the gunshots. Loved what you wrote my dear.
Wow this is nice. The story as well as the initiative. I would love to have topics to write on and would love to take part in this.
Wow that is awesome, I loved the way you have puts your imagination in this story. I must say nice take on the prompt
Wonderful story Varsha. The end took me by surprise, but as we have learned and heard from elders – greed is end of everything. Your story hints at the same saying.
A poignant take of childhood trauma lost opportunity, life of crime and untimely loss of life.You did justice to the prompt with this story.
That’s such good quick story to read about the three brothers. The twist was worth the read. I like your style of crafting fictional stories.
That was an unexpected end, all that they were doing came back to them when they had no where to run or hide. Loved the interpretation!
Poverty , alcohol , drug dealers , robbery looks like you have picked all the ingredient of an bollywood masala movie .. Happy writing .
That’s a good 200’word weave on the prompt Varsh which also gives us a profound lesson. Loved the read
This is a great take on the prompt. I like how you write so effortlessly. Very gripping story. And i like the twist too.
Greed can lead to a path that one never imagines. This is what I can potray from the write shared above, we should not be greedy.
What an action-packed short story. I was expecting some more drama. But the message is very apt that crime never pays. Loved you take on this prompt.